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Post by Dan on Sept 19, 2009 18:27:06 GMT -8
Dan Brown's 20 worst sentences16. The Da Vinci Code, chapter 4: A voice spoke, chillingly close. "Do not move." On his hands and knees, the curator froze, turning his head slowly. Only fifteen feet away, outside the sealed gate, the mountainous silhouette of his attacker stared through the iron bars. He was broad and tall, with ghost-pale skin and thinning white hair. His irises were pink with dark red pupils.A silhouette with white hair and pink irises stood chillingly close but 15 feet away. What’s wrong with this picture?
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Post by jayell on Sept 20, 2009 4:16:54 GMT -8
"A voice spoke" and "froze, turning his head slowly" are priceless.
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Post by Gdogg on Sept 20, 2009 4:22:05 GMT -8
"A voice spoke" and "froze, turning his head slowly" are priceless. I like the helpful examples of enclosed spaces in 15.
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Post by jayell on Sept 20, 2009 8:23:20 GMT -8
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Post by Dan on Sept 20, 2009 8:49:00 GMT -8
I can forgive his using the "skull cradled in his palms" line once (though I'd wonder if his fingers were allowed to touch it), but three times? From the comments: In Dan Brown’s defence, his talent lies not in glowing prose, believable characterisation or factual accuracy but in writing a compelling read. Which is why I think he missed a trick here. Red wine in the skull is bog standard - EVERYONE puts wine in skulls, and almost always red. White or rosé would actually be quite a surprising twist. But gazpacho! Gazpacho would have the reader desperate to get to the next page, to find out WHY that particular refreshing dish was contained in a hollowed-out cranium, why it was tomato and not cucumber or red pepper, and why, suspiciously, whoever it was was serving cold soup in an underground chamber which was already rather chilly.
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Post by bruddah on Sept 24, 2009 13:05:44 GMT -8
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Post by ohk4 on Sept 24, 2009 14:00:13 GMT -8
I took this photo on the island of Réunion in the Indian Ocean and I am pretty sure it was in the town of Le Tampon
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Post by jayell on Sept 24, 2009 17:01:55 GMT -8
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Post by bruddah on Sept 25, 2009 21:50:52 GMT -8
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Post by Duvi on Sept 26, 2009 7:32:07 GMT -8
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Post by bruddah on Oct 1, 2009 6:59:44 GMT -8
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Post by nobodyoudknow on Oct 1, 2009 7:22:27 GMT -8
OK -- whose job is it to tally those instances? What guy sits there with a counter?
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Post by flat on Oct 1, 2009 12:39:33 GMT -8
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Post by lazyranchhand on Oct 1, 2009 13:28:43 GMT -8
I am, yeah - thanks for that, mate!
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Post by Gdogg on Oct 1, 2009 14:22:34 GMT -8
I am, yeah - thanks for that, mate! He's coming here soon. I may have to check him out, even though I'm disposed to dislike someone named "Corb."
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